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SUBMISSION
I hoped that this would be Nirvana
but I sense that's not to be.
The path seems somehow very tangled
Options seem to block the way.
I got a peek into the garden
But I couldn't find the gate.
I asked for help and got a postcard
That I knew not how to mail.
So I launched it into ether,
Sadly turned and walked away.
Maybe on some other day.
ljm
Last few words:
My former site is collapsing behind me and I thought this would be a good refuge, but I can't navigate the site and all the regulatiions. I'm sorry. I did try.
If you google Lori Jones McCaffery, you will see a random mix of my writes, put up by someone without asking me.
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Comments
Geezer
Sun, 2022-11-06 00:44
Hmmmm...
You did manage to post a poem here. There may have been a glitch that prevented it from being posted immediately, but here you are! I do not understand the inference of someone posting your work without asking you. We NEVER do that! We are very strict about that kind of thing! Welcome to Neopoet, we hope you stay! ~ Geezer.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
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Rosewood Apothecary
Sun, 2022-11-06 06:48
It took some time
I’m still learning the site myself. I also found it a bit difficult at first and I would be glad to help.
I really like the poem. I went back and looked at your other poem “Me” and you mentioned your frustrations then and then I realized the meaning of this poem. Sorry to see you go if that’s your decision but I’d like to read more stuff like the poem you just posted. It’s quite musical.
Sorry for the difficulties with the site,
Tim
Ladymac
Fri, 2022-11-11 18:21
Gratitude
Thank you Geezer and Tim for your support. (Do I properly call you Tim or Rosewood Apothecary?) I am going to try to stick it out and learn this site. From here I'll try to find where to post a write.
author commentRosewood Apothecary
Sat, 2022-11-12 17:49
Tim is my proper name
Rosewood Apothecary is my nom de plume for releasing music. Thoughts of Harmony is my Instagram handle.
Rosewood Apothecary
Sat, 2022-11-12 17:49
Tim is my proper name
Rosewood Apothecary is my nom de plume for releasing music. Thoughts of Harmony is my Instagram handle.
Race_9togo
Sat, 2022-11-12 16:33
Ladymac,
Welcome to Neopoet.
You'll find us a pretty welcoming bunch, fairly easy to get along with. The rules? Just remember "courtesy costs nothing", and you won't have any problems!
We don't publish or post other people's poetry without asking for permission first, so that won't be a problem for you either, here.
Good poem, btw. We are a workshop, designed to improve our poetic skills. If I might suggest, when you post something, ask for raw truth. It doesn't mean that we will attack you (!) but we will give honest criticism, if you ask for it. Not that I think you need it, very much!
Again, welcome to our site.
Respectfully, Race
"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo
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