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SUBJECT MATTER

Submitted by Geremia on Fri, 2012-03-30 17:27

SUBJECT MATTER
You are a shadow now
simply subject of my art
lingering behind
some lines of poetry
but there are times
when suddenly
the ghost of you
stands in front of me
and my heart sinks
again

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wesley snow

Fri, 2012-03-30 18:09

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and missed quite a bit of what you've posted. I'm sorry. For me mostly, but it's good to know you're still about. wesley

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Geremia

Fri, 2012-03-30 18:13

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Thanks. Wes. That was very kind of you. Not to worry though.

Joe

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Geezer

Fri, 2012-03-30 19:23

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just say; that one can never feel the hurt of another, but everyone that has ever lost someone they care about,might see themselves in this poem. It made me feel. ~ Gee

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Geremia

Fri, 2012-03-30 20:08

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Thanks, my friend. The heart s broken a hundred times or more in one lifetime, still it goes on beating.To love someone deeply opens us to the risk of being hurt. But, then again, this is one affliction that doesn't kill us.
:) Joe

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loved

Fri, 2012-03-30 21:16

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The heart beats, a million million times

a heart can never break,
its the break -down
elsewhere

in the electronic system of the mind that fails
the heart and mind
are totally independent,
only ones mind derails.

loved

Geremia

Sat, 2012-03-31 00:17

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The heart has a life of its own and has its reasons that Reason will never understand

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loved

Sat, 2012-03-31 02:23

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take care,
we love your vision,
which is exclusive

loved

Geremia

Sat, 2012-03-31 05:26

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One of the nicest compliments ,And I thank you.

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loved

Sat, 2012-03-31 05:53

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Esker and Ian and of course Lady Shirley...now not much on Neo...

'''''APPRECIATE ........................

the wisdom of the ones
who say
what they say
for they do so say
as they have done some homework
yet we may

AND i say never
RIDICULE

Love human beings like a dog ,
if you haven't seen one
GOOGLE
the latest return of a soldier from war ,
no one welcomed him more,
than his own dog
not even his gf /wife..

loved

Geremia

Sat, 2012-03-31 08:51

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You need to post this my friend/ So well said.

joe

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