I like this one a LOT!! And i totally feel you on the subject and content!! Nothing in this needs changed I love it!!! honestly. I feel we will get along very well together. Keep up the amazing work young lady.

Sincerely nichole

a very lovely well written poem
a very note worthy title
the only thing i might suggest is that instead of
having the one word way out to the side for readers to look for slow down the pace
and may even be forgotten its there.

otherwise your poem is great for some your age. you obviously have an inborn talent to be a great poet here
welcome to Neopoet

You dear young girl
are a wizard of creativity .
I couldn't even think
of what you do at your prime age .

But you have been badly hurt
and
creativity is at its utmost best
Hope your struggle
to overcome the past
bears fruit.

As a novice poet too
I adore you .

i knew it! you're good!

Your words are so well crafted I can barely believe your age.

My only suggestion is that you experiment even more with form. You have the potential for greatness.

Love it.