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Shelter

Loss reminds me
to appreciate the moments,
the beauty of time shared
This, the only kindness
grief seems willing to give

Luckily, memories know
to capture the fragments that remain
for refuge against the days to come

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Free verse
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Last few words: 
Grief and love, surely tied for first place as inspiration for poetry.
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Not Explicit Content

Comments

is good. I appreciate the link of idea, that you may need shelter in days to come, when depression over loss may become great. Indeed, love and grief are most likely to tie for the honor of first place in the writing of poetry. Great idea! ~ Geezer.
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Writing purely for oneself, is the ultimate in defensive posture.

Hello, Michael,
Appreciating the present with the good and pleasant memories of the past so that you may find healing and comfort in the future. Seems to be written from experience. I, too, very much like your title. It offers consolation and hope.
Thank you!
L

This is about as true as it gets. Excellent and captivating of grief from a very pragmatic perspective.

Super job,
Tim

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