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A Long Way

Submitted by Michael Anthony on Mon, 2024-03-18 10:36

She couldn't have been farther away.
Even though we were sleeping
here, next to each other.

Slow on the draw, to be sure,
it just took me some time
to get better at recognizing
what empty looked like.

And I understand now
just how far away far away can be
when it’s there in front of you.

Style / type:

Free verse

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Editing - polished draft

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Not Explicit Content

Comments

Lavender

Tue, 2024-03-19 11:10

A Long Way

Hello, Michael,
So many relationships are in "limbo." I recall not realizing what a positive, good relationship was until I was fortunate enough to have one. Like your poem suggests, it just took me awhile to acknowledge the emptiness.
Thank you,
L

Michael Anthony

Wed, 2024-03-20 10:47