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SCOUT LIGHTENING

Submitted by Geremia on Wed, 2015-11-25 18:41

SCOUT LIGHTENING

A memory suddenly appears
like bolts of lightening
before a summer storm
striking the heart
with regret and tears.

joyful recollections from far away
torture wounded hearts
bleeding still
with thoughts of yesterday

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Geezer

Wed, 2015-11-25 20:41

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I do believe that this is the best I have seen from you in some time! Not that anything that you have written is bad or even mediocre, it's just that this is soooo good! Short, succinct and powerful, like the memory that flashes in your mind. You even managed some rhyme! I like it. ~ Gee.

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Geremia

Thu, 2015-11-26 08:26

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thanks , Geez. I liked this one as well and a poem I wrote in memoriam, which happened to have been a result of one of these memory 'strikes"

joe

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scribbler

Thu, 2015-11-26 08:03

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Those memories of people and things from the past Do sometimes come like lightning in a blue sky........stan

Geremia

Thu, 2015-11-26 08:39

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Everything eventually comes back around to ""bite us in the ass"":)

thanks,

joe

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