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The Rose of My Life

Submitted by Unca Fez on Tue, 2023-05-23 15:59

The rose of my life is fading,
Petal by wilting petal.
As each falls to the ground,
A piece of my life goes with it.
But the ultimate beauty
And glorious fragrance of its bloom
Will live in my heart…
Forever.

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This is the first poem that I ever wrote. I wrote it in 2017. It was, originally, posted in Candlewitch's space, in 2022. When I wrote this, I was still commuting to work, so I had over an hour each way. I spent several days' commute reworking this one in my head.

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Tue, 2023-05-23 15:59

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Geezer

Tue, 2023-05-23 16:16

What a beautiful way...

to describe one's life! At first, I thought it might be about a family member or a friend. Great job, no matter. ~ Geez.
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Unca Fez

Tue, 2023-05-23 20:55

Thanks!

When I wrote it, I was thinking of Cat. She is the center of my life.

Thanks for the comment.

Thanx,
Steve

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Rula

Tue, 2023-05-23 16:41

Simply

beautiful.
Crisp with an effective metaphore usage.
Well done indeed.

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Unca Fez

Tue, 2023-05-23 20:58

Thank you!

This was written for my wife, Cat (Candlewitch.) At the time, we were both in our late 60's. I'm not sure what got me thinking along these lines, but I do remember worrying at it for several days.

Thanks, again, for the compliment.

Thanx,
Steve

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Lavender

Tue, 2023-05-23 22:25