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PLACES

Submitted by Geremia on Mon, 2014-07-14 15:23

PLACES

I dreamed a dream
of times gone by
of a world
I thought would never die:
soothing voices,
warm embraces
hearts beating as one.

But the world doesn't speak to me
the way it did before
and all I knew has faded
into Memory's languid caress.

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alidzain

Thu, 2014-09-11 11:48

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this piece started as the voice of everyone's dream and the despair which comes wth time, maybe seeing the dream out of reach. emmm, may I ask why you entitled it "Places"? I hope the others will read this. Its a good write.

Alid

Geremia

Thu, 2014-09-11 15:49

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each moment in time brings us to a different place in life; memory brings back to places in time which fade away with the years.

thank you,

joe

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scribbler

Thu, 2014-09-11 21:41

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You make it seem so easy to write well. I liked this...a lot and see no room for improving it........stan

Geremia

Fri, 2014-09-12 08:32

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:) :)

Thanks. Stan

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