The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem, "Piggly Lane," presents a narrative that explores themes of love, betrayal, and deception. The story unfolds through the perspective of a young woman who falls for a man named Jethro Hardaker, only to discover his true nature and intentions.

The poem's structure is consistent, with a rhyming scheme that adds a rhythmic quality to the narrative. However, the meter could be more consistent to create a smoother reading experience. For example, the line "In the barn we rutted hard, as if it was going out of fashion," disrupts the rhythm due to its length.

The poem's language and imagery are vivid and engaging, effectively conveying the protagonist's emotions and experiences. However, the explicit content and language might limit the poem's audience. The use of metaphor and symbolism, such as the comparison of the protagonist to a pig, is a powerful tool that adds depth to the narrative. However, it could be more subtly integrated to avoid potential confusion or misinterpretation.

The poem's ending provides a strong resolution, revealing Jethro's true nature and the protagonist's reaction. However, the final line could be clarified to more effectively convey the protagonist's feelings and intentions.

Overall, the poem effectively tells a compelling story, but could benefit from more consistent meter, subtler use of metaphor and symbolism, and clarification of the ending.

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You've accomplished well, I think, what you have said you are attempting. I don't know what the specifics of the challenge were but this is definitely light and sing-song-y.

A quick note to address the AI's suggestion with your last line in stanza 3: the problem is not the length, but rather the stress pattern and syllabic organization that make it less smooth. A small change, like adding an unstressed syllable at the beginning of the line and swapping out "as if it were" with "like it were" (removing a syllable), creates a line that more closely matches the pattern of the previous line:

He crowned me queen that evening, in a ceremony of passion
And in the barn we rutted hard, like it were going out of fashion

Of course, perhaps I've scanned it badly as I am unfamiliar with a Southwest English accent.

I think it was entertaining throughout. There were some parts that felt a little unclear to me but the overall progression made sense. I did like that this had a plot / read like a story. And the title is definitely amusing. There were a lot of parts where I think your diction and use of figures of speech was strong. I like how the speakers attitude towards Jethro clearly changed, and for the darker, in the second to last line. "castrating pigs with all his bloody might" really is a violent departure from the language used to describe Jethro previously.

Enjoyed!