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Partitions

Submitted by Michael Anthony on Thu, 2023-02-02 23:40

During the absent days,
although you were near
but at the same time
in some other place,

love may have been there
but I had to guess
most of the time,

and I was terrible at it

Style / type:

Free verse

Review Request (Intensity):

I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Review Request (Direction):

What did you think of my title?

How does this theme appeal to you?

How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Editing stage:

Editing - polished draft

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Rosewood Apothecary

Fri, 2023-02-03 07:08

Difficult

It’s tough to sit with this in a relationship. Sometimes the communication isn’t there. Sometimes it’s not for lack of trying, just other circumstances. It’s very sad but very devotional. I like that.

Tim

Michael Anthony

Sun, 2023-02-05 15:24

Yep, yep and yep! Thanks Tim.

Best

Michael Anthony

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Geezer

Fri, 2023-02-03 14:29

Absolutely...

felt this one! There was this girl... and anyway, she didn't know I existed, let alone have a glance at me.
I like the title, it fits, "Partitioned" off from the same plane as you. The theme is good and one that could be visited from either side. It begins and ends well. ~ Geez.
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Michael Anthony

Sun, 2023-02-05 15:27

The last line was a familiar

The last line was a familiar place for me on a number of occasions Geez, sigh... Partitions = things that divide us. Thank you for stopping by.

Best

Michael Anthony

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