The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Oxygen Mask" employs a metaphor to convey a struggle with expression. The speaker's desire to write about a broader range of topics is evident, but they find it challenging to do so. The use of the oxygen mask as a metaphor is effective in illustrating the speaker's current state of constraint.

However, the poem could benefit from more specific imagery. While the metaphor of the oxygen mask is compelling, it would be beneficial to provide more context or examples of the "everything" the speaker wishes to write about. This would give the reader a clearer understanding of the speaker's struggle and aspirations.

Additionally, the poem's rhythm could be improved. The lines vary in length and syllabic count, which can disrupt the flow of the poem. Experimenting with a more consistent rhythm or structure could enhance the poem's overall impact.

Lastly, the poem could explore the metaphor more deeply. For instance, it could delve into the implications of needing an oxygen mask, such as feelings of suffocation or dependency, to add more depth to the speaker's struggle. This would also create more emotional resonance with the reader.

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Hello, Kristen,
I like this very much. It gives me a melancholy feeling. The struggle in writing something a little less dramatic or intense than the most popular poetry subjects. Or perhaps this is more about the hope of having less intense drama in one's life to write about. Either way, I like the brevity, the metaphor, and the direct language and feel to this.
Thank you!
L