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Lost in the city

Submitted by The Eccentric poet on Sun, 2024-02-04 23:08

Stepping out on to the pavement,
Looking for laughs and light entertainment
Ear plugs planted, pushing through the crowd,
Drown out bad behaviour with the latest sounds.

The Lights are shining, like from another world,
The city is so exciting, inviting for any boy or girl.
Turn the corner, feet feeling the soft urban beat,
As visitors from somewhere dance in the street.

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Just a draft I need to continue with it later
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Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content
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Mon, 2024-02-05 05:10

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Title: Lost in the City

Review:

Thank you for sharing your poem, "Lost in the City." I appreciate the imagery and the sense of excitement you've captured in your words. However, I would like to offer some suggestions to further enhance your piece.

1. Expand on the theme: While you touch upon the idea of being lost in the city, it would be beneficial to explore this theme further. Consider delving into the emotions and experiences associated with feeling lost in a bustling urban environment. This will add depth and complexity to your poem.

2. Use vivid descriptions: Your poem could benefit from more vivid and sensory descriptions. Instead of simply stating that the lights are shining, try to paint a picture with your words. Describe the colors, the way the lights reflect off the buildings, or the atmosphere they create. This will help the reader immerse themselves in the cityscape you're depicting.

3. Develop the narrative: Your poem introduces the idea of visitors from somewhere dancing in the

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