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Legends Never Die

I know you feel like you don't matter
You want to live, but die you would rather
But please, don't you dare quit on me
You giving up makes me question what I'll be

You feel as though your life means nothing
And the joy from others you are sucking
If you're struggling right now, I'm right here
Call me, message me, I'll listen to how you feel

Champions don't give up, they face their fear
They pick themselves up as the battle draws near
Open your eyes, the world is begging you to fight
No matter how bad it looks, everything will be alright

Keep dreaming, one day when the crowds shout your name
You'll be so grateful you didn't take yourself out of the game
When you're laying shattered on the floor asking yourself why
Remember, quitting isn't an option, because Legends Never Die

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Your endings are always so coherent I wonder if you start there and work backwards.

Good timing. Good rhyming. Positive as ever. Compassionate towards others, patient understanding.

Any other bells you’re ringing here that I’ve missed?

Well done,
Tim

A poem idea usually starts with the title. Then I write it and just finish it with that title. I'm so glad it flowed correctly!

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That ending was really powerful. What an interesting poem. Nice work!

"To fly is to fall."

Thank you so much! That means more than you know!

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