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The Narrow Line

Submitted by Shelby Pryor on Thu, 2023-12-21 14:47

God knows I'm grateful
For the boys in blue
But we need to realize
Women are officers too

It's always Mr. Officer
Always about the men
But the ladies out there
Are more than a mother hen

There's a million cliches
A hundred sexist jokes
About the girls in uniform
Like they freeze and choke

I'm grateful for the men
I owe you all my respect
All I'm saying is the girls
Have also paid that debt

All officers deserve honor
They are all the defender
But that narrow blue line
Stretches far beyond gender

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neopoet

Thu, 2023-12-21 20:50

Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "The Narrow Line" addresses the issue of gender inequality within the law enforcement profession. The speaker acknowledges the importance of male officers while also highlighting the need for recognition and respect for female officers. The poem emphasizes that women in uniform are more than just stereotypes and deserve equal honor and appreciation.

The poem effectively conveys its message through concise and straightforward language. The use of short lines and simple phrases helps maintain a clear and direct tone. The repetition of certain phrases, such as "boys in blue" and "girls in uniform," adds emphasis and reinforces the central theme.

One suggestion for improvement is to consider expanding on the experiences or challenges faced by female officers. This could help provide a more nuanced perspective and further engage the reader. Additionally, exploring specific examples or anecdotes could make the poem more relatable and impactful.

Overall, "The Narrow Line" effectively raises awareness about gender inequality within the law enforcement profession and advocates for equal recognition and respect for female officers. With some further development, the poem

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Candlewitch

Thu, 2023-12-21 15:15