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I know nothing of love

Submitted by Leslie on Sun, 2024-06-30 16:43

I know nothing now
and I knew nothing then
about love and relationships
how they begin, how they end
far be it from me
to start over again
in all of it's agony
love is a trend
a thing briefly passing
just like the wind
your lover's will lie to you
on your knee you will bend
inevitably it always comes
to an inglorious end!

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem, "I know nothing of love," presents a clear and consistent theme of disillusionment with love and relationships. The use of repetition, particularly in the lines "I know nothing now / and I knew nothing then," effectively underscores the speaker's consistent lack of understanding or disillusionment with love.

However, the poem could benefit from a more varied and complex use of language. The language currently used is relatively simple and straightforward, which can limit the depth of emotion and complexity that the poem is able to convey. For example, the line "love is a trend" could be expanded upon to provide a more nuanced critique of love and relationships in contemporary society.

Additionally, the rhythm of the poem is somewhat inconsistent. The poem begins with a regular rhythm, but this is disrupted in the lines "in all of it's agony / love is a trend." Maintaining a consistent rhythm throughout the poem could help to enhance its overall flow and musicality.

Lastly, the poem's use of clichés, such as "just like the wind" and "to an inglorious end," can detract from its originality. Replacing these clichés with more unique and personal imagery could help to make the poem more engaging and distinctive.

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