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I hear you
Most times I hear your call, of course
Your crawl, your tears, your fall
In those tiny moments,
Between the stories, the tarots and texts,
I hear you
If I told you, you denied me
You told me "no"
But I can hear you, I can feel you
You're crying, hoping, wishing
Yet you deny me
What do you want from me, my dear?
That's so dear yet you won't admit?
That you love me too?
That you feel this too?
I leave this to you,
I've played my part
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neopoet
Fri, 2024-07-05 03:10
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
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Mark
Fri, 2024-07-05 21:41
The last line Amo
I've played my part
You need to rethink (rewrite that ending) it is very shallow. A turnoff my friend.
Stay on it,
Mark
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