The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Grief" explores the emotional pain of losing someone dearly loved. The imagery of the speaker's memory of the loved one's laughter and touch is poignant and evokes a sense of longing. The line "To fill your mind once more" is particularly effective in conveying the speaker's desire to be remembered by the loved one. However, the line "You can't see me" feels somewhat abrupt and disconnected from the rest of the poem. It may benefit the poem to add a line that explains why the loved one cannot see the speaker, such as "Your eyes closed forevermore" or "Lost to the depths of time." This addition would give more context and enhance the emotional impact of the poem. Overall, "Grief" is a heartfelt and moving exploration of loss.

Line edit suggestion:
- From: "You can't see me"
- To: "Your eyes closed forevermore, you can't see me."

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I like the thought of "filling your mind once more"
and "your skin being worn thin" with regard to Grief.

I could relate to all that you have written, Ruby.
I think grief should be quick and brief,
deep and remembered.

Obi.

Sorry for your loss! The sting of death is horrific when it hits on the loved one.
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This poem made me think of multiple losses...some from death and some for other reasons. A short poem that says a lot. Well done.