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Giants Fall

Everybody around is telling you
To let go of what you're holding to
It's too late, you've gone too far
You'll never pull the winning card

Throwing water on that spark
Living deep inside your heart
With oceans of reasons
The things you're not seeing

Take that water they throw in your face
Turn it into gasoline to fuel you on your chase
Take their oceans full of impossibilities
Transform them into a world of opportunities

Take those stones they've tossed your way
Gather them one by one, day by day
Put them in your slingshot one and all
Take your shot and watch the Giants Fall

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Love the last four lines ...David and goliath inspired I imagine ... really very good x

Yes, it was! Guess that story has always had a special meaning to me lol. Thank you!

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Thank you so much!!!

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David and Goliath. Excellent offering as usual.
Tim

Yes, that was my inspiration:) Thank you so much for always commenting and your support, I truly appreciate it!

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