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Giants Fall
Everybody around is telling you
To let go of what you're holding to
It's too late, you've gone too far
You'll never pull the winning card
Throwing water on that spark
Living deep inside your heart
With oceans of reasons
The things you're not seeing
Take that water they throw in your face
Turn it into gasoline to fuel you on your chase
Take their oceans full of impossibilities
Transform them into a world of opportunities
Take those stones they've tossed your way
Gather them one by one, day by day
Put them in your slingshot one and all
Take your shot and watch the Giants Fall
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Words.unwritten
Fri, 2023-01-20 02:15
Love the last four lines ..
Love the last four lines ...David and goliath inspired I imagine ... really very good x
Shelby Pryor
Fri, 2023-01-20 10:48
Words Unwriten
Yes, it was! Guess that story has always had a special meaning to me lol. Thank you!
Shelby Pryor
Fri, 2023-01-20 10:58
Ekaterina Alexa
Thank you so much!!!
Rosewood Apothecary
Fri, 2023-01-20 08:32
Nice reference
David and Goliath. Excellent offering as usual.
Tim
Shelby Pryor
Fri, 2023-01-20 11:00
Rosewood Apothecary
Yes, that was my inspiration:) Thank you so much for always commenting and your support, I truly appreciate it!