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First Poem Of The Year/Snowfall In Vancouver

Snow falling on this dirty old town
Covers up these dirty old streets
Bringing this big city insanity to an end for a while ...

Meanwhile, the band plays on.

"There's a blizzard out there, in case you guys haven't noticed!"
The singer says;

The audience responds,
"Yeah, man! There's all this white shit out there!"

But they've got it wrong
The shit's what's being covered up
By the snow ...

It's really coming down –
A whiteout –
As I walk home from the Hungry Elephant,
Or is it the Cruel Eye?
Forgetting the midterm I have to write later this morning
In the sublime joy of the moment;
Even the junkies trying to sell me drugs on Hastings Street
Are entranced by the wonder of it all;
They're less intense, relaxed and friendly.
A Fallen Angel, junky or hooker,
Maybe just another homeless person
Trying to survive in the dark alleys
Behind the bright city lights,
Asks me if I can spare a looney.
I give her my last one
And she walks with me down Hastings Street,
Chatting amiably
Clearly delighted
To have someone to talk to,
To share this moment with.
What is it about snow falling
That makes us feel so alive
In the moment
Entranced with wonder
At this mundane event? –
This lost child of the streets
And every kid in school looking out the window
"It's snowing!?"
And seeing those big white flakes start coming down
So that the whole class must dash to the back of the classroom
To have a look
To their teacher's dismay –
She has lost control
For that brief interval
Between the first child seeing snowflakes
And her entire class crowding the windows
To watch them coming down.

That first fall of snow
Telling us
That Winter
Has finally arrived.

I love it down here
Where I feel at home, at last
For the first time since I came back to this strange land called Canada –
Despite the harsh reality of poverty and despair
There's a desperate honesty that's lacking on the other side of town
Where the doctors and lawyers and developers live –
The crême de la crême
Of Vancouver Society –
Here is where I belong
Encapsulated
Within the City's urban depths

And, the snow –
I've always loved you
Soft sweet snow falling all around
Rustling softly
As you tickle my cheeks;
You make everything -
so ... Pretty!

In Montreal, I would shovel snow
In the velvet dark of a winter’s night,
No one else around
Just the soft gentle rustle of falling snow
Like a Zen koan;
Within half an hour
I'ld be stripped down to a T-shirt
Even though it was ten below,
Forever shovelling snow ...

Snow, it glitters in rainbow hues
Under the street lamps,
A halo of sparkling particles
Centred around the beam's radiant glow
Spreading outwards from its source.

Snow, glittering on the sidewalks
In the daytime;
When the sun shines
It almost blinds
A crystalline dazzle of polar light
Like cold fire ...

I hope the weather turns cold
And the snow sticks around for a while
Like an old friend from far away
Who turns up on your doorstep
Looking for a place to stay
While he's in town
Just passing through.
Strathcona, Vancouver Jan/Feb, 1995

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For non-Canadians, a looney is a $1 coin. The coin depicts a loon on the tail side; hence the nickname. Since this was written we also brought out a $2 coin. This depicts a polar bear. When it was first brought out, much debate ensued about what nickname to give it. For a brief moment, it might have been called a "doublooney" but "twooney" won out instead. (It has fewer syllables, which, in Canada, is a critically important criterion.) I was attending the University of British Columbia, pursuing a double major in Biology and Mathematics when this was written. My fellow university students rarely ventured into this part of Vancouver, and when they did so, passed through it as quickly as they could. For some reason, they were afraid of the place!
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Just absolutely astounding. I can see the way you feel. This is a bullseye.

Brilliant work
Tim

Thanks! I just wish I could get stuff published, but from editors, all I get back is form letters, to the point where I have all but given up. (Sometimes, poems, such as this one, are too long for them, but that's only certain poetry magazines.)

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thanks for explaining what a "Looney is. I enjoyed this long walk through time and humanity. it is a beautiful with great vibes. my favorite lines are:

Snow, glittering on the sidewalks
In the daytime;
When the sun shines
It almost blinds
A crystalline dazzle of polar light
Like cold fire ... (so expressive, especially this line!)

thanks for sharing this with the rest of us poets :)
*hugs, Cat

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It's interesting, that, in this context of snow and cold, the first poems I wrote when I decided (in my first semester of Grade 12) were about cold and snow. And, up in Inuvik, in the Northwest Territories, I saw some really interesting paintings that captured that feel of the wintry night (which in turn inspired me to write another poem). I am kind of slowly sticking poems on here that were referenced in Capsaicin Structure, the first being the Back and Forth poems. I have a few more about the Downtown Eastside (including two about this young girl who hustled me at the bust stop early one September morn when I was on my way to school, one of which also mentions a rainy night seeing a woman hitching for tricks and yelling at the cars in her frustration when they won't stop). When I was living in the DES, I got to know a lot of these people whom I was initially afraid of: crackwhores and intravenous drug users living rough on the streets or dossing wherever they can find a bed. It formed the nucleus of a huge poem I wrote while teaching Maths in a place called Guernsey, that took three years to write and god knows how many to edit. (I suspect it is my answer to Leaves of Grass, which Whitman continued to edit for the rest of his life.)

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I'm glad you hear those voices in there, because, as I mentioned in a reply to another comment, I have a huge poem that seems to have become my answer to Leaves of Grass, since, though it took three years to write, has suffered constant editing ever since! (I wrote it between 2005 and 2008.) And of course, I love Ginsberg, who is my favourite of the Beat Poets. (I also quite liked Gary Snyder.) In some ways, those two Beats were probably an influence in how my Free Verse poetry evolved, but it was an unconscious influence since my poetry was evolving before I read their stuff. (I read some of Ginsberg and a whole whack of Snyder's poetry in 1975, when I was living in Oakland, CA and taking Creative Writing courses at Merritt Junior College.) I like as well the fact that they were as inspired as I am by the Lost Generation Poets of the Great War, Wilfred Owen, Siegfried Sassoon, Robert Graves, Ivor Gurney, et al. (I'm currently reading Edmond Blunden's poems to accompany his reminiscences of the war between 1916 and 1917, "Undertones of War".) (I've also just finished rereading all of Sappho's surviving poems. I like those three Ancient Greek poets who invented Lyric Poetry round 600 BC: Sappho, Alcaeus and Anacreon, whom I only discovered in 2014.)

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Yeah I used to have at least two books of his poems, most of them back to the land poems. A member of the Beat Generation who became a hippy but who always had a love for wilder regions of the West. And, you're very welcome! I intend to read all the poems you have posted on here, but not tonight. Tonight I have to remember a friend overseas, someone who was probably the best friend I ever had. Just gotta go pour myself a big glass of whiskey first. (Can't even remember the last time I drank Whiskey. Like you, I am no longer a spry youth, sigh …)

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I meant to mention that I listened to some of your songs on YouTube and was wondering if you've ever thought about collaborating with someone?

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