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First Friends

Submitted by Michael Anthony on Mon, 2023-02-27 11:34

Can you dance Mr. Bear?
Yes, when I find some honey in a tree,
or wherever I discover it

My button eyes
and felt covered nose
are more keen
than they may seem.

Is it sweet like me,
this honey, Mr. Bear?
Yes, and I would always share it with you.
I really don't mind.

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Free verse
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Last few words: 
A little whimsy for the week. I REALLY wish I could have posted the picture that inspired this little piece.
Editing stage: 
Editing - polished draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Lavender

Mon, 2023-02-27 11:57

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Good morning, Michael,
I trust that the picture would add to your poem, but I can't imagine the feeling being any clearer or stronger. Your lovely poem reads like a devoted companion, just like Mr. Bear and his sweet friend.
Thank you,
L
(I bought Musical Tables yesterday. Imaginative and inspiring! Thank you for noting it in your last few words of your own inspiring poem, "Little Crimes")

Michael Anthony

Wed, 2023-03-01 09:54

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Glad you discovered the book by Billy Collins L! He is one of my biggest inspirations. Be well.

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Michael Anthony

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lovedly

Mon, 2023-02-27 12:17

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neither can one relish em nor throw
till they their true form show
you know...

Michael Anthony

Wed, 2023-03-01 09:54

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Thanks Mark! Hope you are well.

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Michael Anthony

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Geezer

Mon, 2023-02-27 13:57

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A child's friend forever. Mr. Bear will always be the first friend; so sweet as the honey shared. ~ Geez.
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Michael Anthony

Wed, 2023-03-01 09:55

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Awww, thanks Geez!

Michael Anthony

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Michael Anthony

Wed, 2023-03-01 09:56

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Thank you E!

Cheers

Michael Anthony

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