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THE DITCHED HOTEL

Submitted by Jokerface82 on Wed, 2024-10-16 11:05

The abandoned hotel was
concealed, shrouded and
took possession by coils
and tassles of poltergeist-
grey mist.

Aggravating staff and
and guests giving know
option but to dissappear

Backflows and spirals like
a ghouls breath mantled
the forest and guest house.
Navigating and

twisting Into the abyss black
tunnels and up staircases
with an ethereal glow. Like
nosey guests going over
the place with a torch
Investigating like an detective

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Workshop:

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Contest:

Haunted Hotel Image Prompt Contest

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neopoet

Wed, 2024-10-16 11:05

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Candlewitch

Wed, 2024-10-16 11:10

Dear Joker,

I much enjoyed your take on the contest! I especially enjoyed these lines:

twisting Into the abyss black
tunnels and up staircases
with an ethereal glow. Like
nosey guests going over
the place with a torch
Investigating like an detective

good luck on the contest!
*hugs, Cat

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Jokerface82

Wed, 2024-10-16 11:25