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Desert Storms

Submitted by Rosewood Apothecary on Thu, 2023-01-26 02:41

My place of patience always fleeting
Slipping through my very hands
Blown about by my hot air
Like storms that rise from desert sands

It’s best not to disturb the grains
For to the wind they would be cast
Instead I’ll steady mind and heart
Until the savage storm has passed

Rescinding to my inner self
Reflective meditation deep
A trance divine and self imposed
Now awakens me from sleep

I borrow strength from unknown source
I sit within the fray
Time holds dominion over all
Howling winds will fade away

When they do and I remain
I’ll take the energy I’ve saved
Add it to my bag of spoils
Reminders of the trials I’ve braved

Style / type:

Structured: Western

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing stage:

Editing - polished draft

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Candlewitch

Thu, 2023-01-26 08:06

dear Tim,

these lines of yours captivated me:

I borrow strength from unknown source
I sit within the fray
Time holds dominion over all
Howling winds will fade away

When they do and I remain
I’ll take the energy I’ve saved
Add it to my bag of spoils
Reminders of the trials I’ve braved

I can only hope for the same and to learn from you, dear Bard.
*hugs, Cat

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Geezer

Thu, 2023-01-26 09:39

A magnificent...

piece dedicated to the way of inner strength and not giving in to the temptation of jumping into every fray. Great stuff! ~ Geez.
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RoseBlack

Thu, 2023-01-26 09:51