The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem effectively uses a first-person narrative to explore the theme of death and the afterlife. The use of direct address to the reader creates an engaging and immersive experience.

However, the poem could benefit from a more consistent rhythm and meter. For instance, the second line of the first stanza has a different rhythm from the rest of the stanza, which can disrupt the flow for the reader. Consider revising this line to better match the rhythm of the surrounding lines.

The poem also uses a variety of sensory descriptions, such as "my throat it rasps so sore" and "my feet are freezing, blocks of ice," which effectively convey the speaker's physical experience. However, the poem could further develop its exploration of the speaker's emotional and psychological state. For example, the speaker could elaborate on the line "I am done, completely" to provide more insight into their feelings about death.

Furthermore, the poem's imagery is sometimes unclear. For example, the line "Circumstance took his chance, and yes, I did submit" is somewhat vague. The poem could benefit from more concrete and specific imagery to clarify its meaning.

Lastly, the poem's use of rhetorical questions, such as "can you hear my words meekly?" and "tell me how you mourn?" effectively engage the reader and provoke thought. However, the poem could further develop these questions to deepen its exploration of the theme of death and the afterlife.

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Hey, just imagine Christopher Lee reciting this !
now wouldn't that be something spooky Ruby ??

I have found that your work is best read as slowly as possible,
Nice one petal !!

Obi.

Hi, Ruby,
Very eerie, indeed! Wonderful job with rhyme scheme. I tend to be a bit claustrophobic - your poem is a huge trigger! Even so, I enjoyed this!
L