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Cut Flowers

Submitted by Michael Anthony on Sat, 2023-07-29 10:52

She had broken pieces when we met.
Some of the shards piercing her still,
revealing a disquiet of scars.
Love, the brigand that put them there.

When I gave her cut flowers
she had no chance of seeing
the field of understanding and tenderness
from which they came.

Style / type:

Free verse

Review Request (Intensity):

I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Review Request (Direction):

How does this theme appeal to you?

How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Last few words:

Revisiting this piece. Sometimes our pasts keep us from seeing a future.

Editing stage:

Editing - polished draft

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Geezer

Sat, 2023-07-29 11:21

Absolutely stunning...

I wouldn't change or add a thing! I did think of eliminating the comma, which to my way of thinking, would change the whole context of the piece. ~ Geez.
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Michael Anthony

Tue, 2023-08-08 00:48