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cry
i cry my Eyes out, As if it would help. It won't, its Water trickling down your face, Evacuating My eyes
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I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Last few words:
enjoy
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Not Explicit Content
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neopoet
Sat, 2023-08-12 21:10
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
Thank you for sharing your poem titled "cry." I appreciate your willingness to receive feedback. Here are some thoughts on your poem:
1. Punctuation and capitalization: Pay attention to consistent punctuation and capitalization throughout your poem. In some lines, you have capitalized words that do not require it, and there are instances where punctuation is missing. This can affect the flow and clarity of your poem.
2. Metaphorical language: You use the metaphor of crying as water trickling down your face. This imagery effectively conveys the act of crying. However, consider exploring more unique and vivid metaphors to enhance the emotional impact of your poem.
3. Structure and rhythm: Your poem lacks a clear structure or consistent rhythm. Consider experimenting with different poetic forms or techniques to give your poem a more cohesive and engaging structure. This can help guide the reader through your emotions and thoughts.
4. Depth and exploration: While your poem captures the feeling of crying, it would benefit from delving deeper into
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Geezer
Sat, 2023-08-12 20:16
This could...
be sooooo much more! ~ Geezer.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
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Triskelion
Sun, 2023-08-13 15:29
Let's see
"i cry my Eyes out, As if it would help. It won't, its Water trickling down your face, Evacuating My eyes"
If I use the capitol letters in this, and rearrange them, I can make "Aimee W." Do you know someone with that name?
I can read a lot into this, so in my opinion it is really undeveloped. I hope you have the interest and dedication to others on the site to really grow this. Unfortunately, I have no suggestions until I see what direction this takes, but I will welcome you to Neopoet!
Thomas
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...so like my lost dreams...the flood