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has flown to his nest,
with a bleeding heart,
each night and day,
it feels a clipping pain.

To flap its wings,
to soar its highway,
and to seek solace and

A solitary bird, full of vision,
young, strong and could fly
beyond the reach of others,
now suffering the wind of time.

A well versed bird,
tweeting the psalm of life,
reassuring the punctured souls,
now a victim of circumstance!

What a paradox that we can't
all comprehend?
The uncertainty of climate
change has stirred bewilderment of sudden change.

How will it survive
this harsh realities ravaging at this time?
A hopeful bird, now stranded,
perching lonely on the river bank.

©® Onyinyechi Cosmos Etu

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The poem "The Chased Bird" by Onyinyechi Cosmos Etu explores the pain and struggle of a bird that has been wounded and forced to abandon its freedom. The theme of the poem centers on the paradox of life and the sudden changes that can disrupt even the most well-versed and strong beings.

The imagery in the poem is quite vivid and the use of metaphors and alliteration adds to the beauty of the language. The reader can feel the bird's pain and sense of loss as it longs to fly and seek solace. The use of the word "paradox" in the poem is particularly noteworthy as it highlights the irony of the bird's situation.

However, the poem could benefit from some minor edits to improve the flow and clarity of the language. For instance, in the second stanza, the line "and seek solace and rehabilitation" could be revised to "to seek solace and rehabilitation". This would help to create a clearer sentence structure and emphasize the bird's yearning to heal.

Overall, "The Chased Bird" is a poignant and thought-provoking poem that captures the struggles of life in a beautiful way. With some minor edits, it could become an even more polished and impactful piece of writing.

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I assume that this poem is brought about by your interest in government and the ravages of greed and impropriety.
I think your bird is a political-refugee, and poised to come when they have the support of the people. best of luck to you! ~ Geezer.

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I liked the way you examine poems here. Thank you so much Sir Geezer.

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Hello, Jackweb,
I took this poem pretty literally - or at least, it has the potential to be taken literally. The mention of climate change connected me to the plight of the bird and nature in general. Of course, we humans are severely, horrifically affected, too. The last stanza is filled with strong language - hopeful, but realistic. I noticed the beginning of the poem referred to the bird as "his" yet the rest of the poem the bird was referred to as "it." I'm wondering if personifying the bird all the way through the poem would be beneficial. Just a thought! Really like the title.
Thank you!

Thank you so much for the read. Yes, it was initially personified. You really nailed it here: I liked your in- depth analysis. "I took this poem pretty literally - or at least, it has the potential to be taken literally.

"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".


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