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CATCH THE GOLDEN RING edit
CATCH THE GOLDEN RING
In a circle bound
like a merry-go-round
beginnings seek their end
never knowing when,
I catch the moments
and hold them fast
but soon the present
becomes the past
and the future comes
all too soon.
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Comments
weirdelf
Tue, 2014-06-03 22:06
You know the difference between the poetic use of the word
"conceit" and "conceited", I presume. An elegant and deceptively deep one, Joe,
The emotion lies coolly in wait, like a trap for the unwary.
Fine work.
cheers,
Jess
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Geremia
Wed, 2014-06-04 02:36
Thank you for that, Jess.
Thank you for that, Jess.
I hope you can catch the "golden ring"",
Joe
Ian.T
Wed, 2014-06-04 03:50
Joe
I enjoyed this read it was of a circle sometimes we need another circle within to be able to step off and watch the other.
Yours Ian.T
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Geremia
Wed, 2014-06-04 05:43
I am dealing with too many
I am dealing with too many circles at once,
emeka ozurumba
Wed, 2014-06-04 06:19
i feel the poem should be
i feel the poem should be longer for more use of your greater creativity
emeka ozurumba
Wed, 2014-06-04 06:20
and what of the golden ring
and what of the golden ring that can be caught if not times elude
Geremia
Wed, 2014-06-04 09:34
The golden ring is happiness.
The golden ring is happiness. It eludes most of us,
thank you, and thank you for your compliment in first commentary. This poem is long for me, My poems are short and I make my metaphors engage your thoughts. There is much to decipher,
Joe
Seren
Thu, 2014-06-05 12:08
Dearest Joe
I have missed reading you, this is a cracker and I cannot find fault
bravo darlin'
much love and hugs Jayne xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Geremia
Fri, 2014-06-06 14:29
Good to hear from you, my
Good to hear from you, my Jayne and thanks
your Joe
loved
Fri, 2014-06-06 16:52
just wonderful
a golden ring
we all dream
b'coz
happiness it can bring
loved