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cant take that from me

see me work hard for something then someone comes around n takes it from u dont let that shit happen charce wht u have and hold on to it wit every dyin last breath thats wht i do cant take that from me
i been struggling ever since a little girl hali rappers never thought i had a chance my lifes breakin up its like a alvange 3 days of the same pants sleepin at my fake ants whats u take girls for its time to change up no more dirty clothes or that old lunch i fight for whats mine now now i put mines guns i stand up women up no time to run uh huh i reach for the top till i hold the sun yet respect loyalty and honor i love my niggas love my daughters i love you too baby i anit forget u papi n one love to my brother shawty thats my sister mf yes i made it yes i did it on my own fuck u hali suxers hali superos mcs aw u gotta love us i been broke n now im tryin to get rich no u cant take that from me
every thing i got i work hard for my baby brought me in hes the only one who tought he brought me no u cant take that from me
im from the bottom but the top is were i stand now yall just watch me ya i can stand alone its my time to shine now pass me the micro phone yes im reastless now i cant wait to glow now im out of town takin pics performin shows now im like ya ya i like the lime light this is my life n my story n imma tell u it n hope u listen yes its real talk not non ficton
i rember getting pushed around then i started pushin back my life change up then i started pushin rap matter fact any thing i got my hands on try to revaule my moms opens up the doors anything i got is cuz i worked hard for ya u cant take that from me yes from the bottom to the mirror this is no joke no will farell ya i was bad to the bone but im not talkin maral yes i got sore loveuals sparll ah yo yes i been engleted ever since the craddle yet was so young so unstable no heat n all un cut cables always slippin n fallin ya my wounds they were fetal ya now its me whos not the world we live in thug life in memory of tupac ya this shit is in my dna now rest in peice i cant wait until we met face to face me i got princealpils n morals n i anit tryin to poural over a fuckin message in a bottle or a slizy top modle im a full queen heres queen i always pull strings n push buttons but i keep fath n keep pushin heads high cuz i cant go for nothing

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