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Approximate Fool

Submitted by Michael Anthony on Wed, 2023-12-20 23:59

Love might have been there somewhere.
In between your elsewhere days.

But you made me guess
most of the time. I resented you for it.

And I was terrible at both.

Style / type:

Free verse

Review Request (Intensity):

I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Review Request (Direction):

What did you think of my title?

How does this theme appeal to you?

Last few words:

I love how poetry can condense feelings and experiences that took so much time to sort out into such a short poem.

Editing stage:

Editing - polished draft

Contest:

Neopoet Weekly 12/17/23 to 12/23/23

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Ruby Lord

Thu, 2023-12-21 06:29

Ouch and wow at the same time

Ouch and wow at the same time. Yes, you've condensed your experiences here and folded them into a small but powerful poem. It made me sit up and take notice of each word. Well done. Ruby :) xx

Give and grow - let's raise our verses together. I'm happy to comment on your work and appreciate a comment on mine.

Michael Anthony

Sat, 2023-12-23 10:50

Ouch - Exactly how it felt

Ouch - Exactly how it felt writing this one Ruby, thank you for sharing your thoughts on this one.

Best

Michael Anthony

author comment

Geezer

Thu, 2023-12-21 12:17

Wow...

A masterpiece of condensation, a perfect picture of a page from someone's diary. ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Michael Anthony

Sat, 2023-12-23 10:51

"Diary page" - I like that

"Diary page" - I like that Geez! Thanks for stopping by.

Best

Michael Anthony

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Lavender

Thu, 2023-12-21 19:15