Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.
mute
(
)
I can't
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage:
Contest:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
Opt-in: Neopoet AI will critique your poem.
(c) Neopoet.com. No copyright is claimed by Neopoet to original member content.
Comments
neopoet
Wed, 2024-09-18 04:50
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
It is not feasible to offer feedback.
Please send feedback about Neo (our computer generated critique system) to https://www.neopoet.com/contact
Rula
Wed, 2024-09-18 12:50
Hello J.
I am sorry. But this hardly reads as a poem. Do I sound like an idiot?
❤❤❤❤❤❤
Please follow me on Instagram https://instagram.com/poetry.jo?igshid=YmMyMTA2M2Y=
Jakub Zoltowski
Wed, 2024-09-18 19:58
Argument
I disagree, sometimes the shortest form can, evoke.
author commentRoseBlack
Wed, 2024-09-18 21:18
While there isn't much content
I am seeing that there is a connection between what was displayed and the title. My impression is that the reader has been silenced or is expected to stay silent and "can't," as it states in the last line. The use of parenthesis in the first two lines with no words symbolizes the silence. Poems generally use words to evoke imagery or symbolism. Your way is rather creative and a style all of its own. I am curious to hear why you chose to use this form and if this is a style you personally created or something you were exposed to.
~RoseBlack~
Geezer
Thu, 2024-09-19 00:37
I can't...
... ~ Geezer.
.
There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.
mark
Thu, 2024-09-19 00:39
I can't
Etither,
try some of mine!
Jakub Zoltowski
Thu, 2024-09-19 12:27
Le forgetfulness
Thank You guys for your comments.
I sometimes forget to appreciate,
not this time. :)
author commentCandlewitch
Thu, 2024-09-19 12:33
to my of thinking...
I do not get it...this is not a poem. I am sorry but could you help me to understand it? thank you in advance.
*hugs, Cat
*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
Jakub Zoltowski
Thu, 2024-09-19 14:06
Candle Witch
Hi, so, in my poetry I use the visuals in conjunction with the words.
In my view, Poetry is more than just words, and images as well as other signs, separate from words can be a part of it.
The brackets in my poem, unfortunately, are not as placed as I wanted them initially, because the Neopoet app, is displacing them, or incorrectly trying to replace them.
As to the meaning of the poem, I will not speak about that. Because. Even though I could point You to my way of thinking, it would only force your interpretation of my poem, which I wish not to spoil for you. :)
I believe in the power of the different interpretations, as such.
My only suggestion could be, that you may try to imagine this poem as a visual composition, similar to the painting. Place the brackets in the spaces as You wish. Farer or closer to each other :)
With Regards,
Jakub
author commentGeezer
Thu, 2024-09-19 14:18
Okay...
Now, in that context, I begin to see it. I'm on the fence. ~ Geez.
.
There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.