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Too good to be true- With A Love of Confession

Submitted by Hon on Sat, 2024-08-17 16:43

My love for you
is a true confession
that it is too good to be true
with a display of affectionate

From my pure sincerest heart
with unwaveringly profound care
through a testament declare
with tears that it symbolizes

Like a fresh dew droplet in the morning
resting on your soft petal cheek
with a refreshing caressing touch
lingering on the green stem flourish heart

Flowing through the absorb of thirst quest
with a glowing smile on your face
from the radiant sunlight
brighten up the sorrow of the day

As our journey began
to share our vow
it is a sign that we belong together
for a lifetime commitment forever

Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Contest: 
08/24 Too Good to be True
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content
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Sat, 2024-08-17 22:43

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Too good to be true- With A Love of Confession" demonstrates a strong use of imagery and metaphor, particularly in the fourth stanza with the comparison of love to a dew droplet on a petal. This vivid imagery helps to create an emotional connection with the reader.

However, the poem could benefit from more consistent use of rhythm and meter. The irregularity of the line lengths and syllable counts can disrupt the flow of the poem and make it difficult to read. Consider revising the poem with a consistent meter in mind to enhance its musicality and readability.

Additionally, the poem could be improved by more precise use of language. For example, the phrase "with a deep display of affectionate" is grammatically incorrect and confusing. It's unclear what is being described as affectionate. Revising for clarity and grammatical correctness can help to convey the intended meaning more effectively.

Lastly, the poem seems to rely heavily on cliches, such as "my love for you" and "a lifetime commitment forever". While these phrases are universally understood, they lack originality and can make the poem feel generic. Experimenting with more unique and personal expressions of love could make the poem more engaging and memorable.

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