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Carnal Haven (adult)

Carnal Haven
(Adult)

the climax of my youth
was spent in his arms
where he stirred my inner muse
with slow hands and hungry thigh
he conquered my inhibitions
transforming me into
the keeper of my own soul
together we pushed the boundaries
of the erotic envelope
while prodding fingers of velvet softness
pressed against darkened star strewn skies
the voyeur in me came alive
sprouting wings of passion
from the sating juices of honeyed release
while the late evening breeze
whispered sweetly of night blooming jasmine
in a forbidden lover's garden.

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for Terry Asher who encouraged me to write poetry.
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Nice. Took me to a place that I should hold private...

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I appreciate you having read and commented on my poem. I'm so glad you enjoyed it.

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...I was half expecting a finale with a hooded Eddy Styx popping up to ruin the erotic moment.

Carefully drafted piece of poetry that stirs inner emotions & memories.

A delight to read you,

One.

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"with all that I am & all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me"

eddy will be back today! it is great to see you being an active member and all that it entails, lol. I love your comments. intelligent and smooth.

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