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Incantations of Seduction
I felt your hand
bunched
in Egyptian cotton,
unbinding
a day’s inhibitions
fabric curtained
and fell, with it
restraint
floated away
you come within
fingers of breath
from my lips,
a tongue’s touch
of bare tips
stroking desire
the scent of your lust,
overwhelms
a bead of desire,
pooled to the corner
of my mouth,
I could smell in you
musk and oak
wafting
on invisible
incantations
pulsing the air,
you smelt so good
I could have eaten you
as I did,
your desire
unleashed
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage:
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Comments
sueb
Fri, 2013-01-25 05:18
love passionate write the 1st
love passionate write the 1st verse is my fave much enjoyed cheers x
Seren
Fri, 2013-01-25 08:08
Thanks Sue
I am still working on this one but its getting close
I'm very happy you liked this one
Hugs Jc xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Ian.T
Fri, 2013-01-25 09:57
Jayne
What you trying to do to us Oldies LOL????????
Cold showers in Winter are not on LOL
Is this a concrete poem or did it just fall that way, Yours Ian.T
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Seren
Fri, 2013-01-25 21:25
Ian
It just kind of fell that way I guess it could be a concrete poem ..
Lol no cold showers in the winter brrrrrr
Glad it hit the mark
Lobe always Jc xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
loved
Fri, 2013-01-25 11:30
step by step ...then sideways
all men follow some silent footsteps till last days
if this site had
had the number
who have read
then this one
would head
the list ,
alas no one listens
who damn cares
how many have read
but a poets heart it enlightens..
those who say else-wise need simply to be forgotten
does this look like a ccc CAPS CCC
loved
Seren
Fri, 2013-01-25 21:29
loved
I am happy if they are read
Doesn't matter the quantity
It's the quality that counts
Smiles
Love Jc xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
loved
Sat, 2013-01-26 00:10
but as so many say ...in my case its QUANTITY
how do I manufacture
QUALITY
just tell me
guide me
advise
or
rap
if you please
loved
Seren
Sat, 2013-01-26 00:33
the poem never leaves the
the poem never leaves the mind
it stays there until it must be written
then it forms into "something"
then that something has substance
the substance becomes theme
then all the hard work starts
editing and reediting until
it becomes a poem or
something resembling a poem
love Jayne-Chloe xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Nordic cloud
Sat, 2013-01-26 08:03
Natty design
Natty placing of you poem dear Jayne,
You start with the unbinding
of the Egyptian mummy,
the awakening of the libido to life,
unable to resisit,
the breath of the fingers,
and the odours of the body,
(that my father said were infinitely
more attractive than all oher perfumes,)
What a meal,
although I'm not sure it is enhanced by the lay out.
Love Ann.
"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.
Seren
Sat, 2013-01-26 22:43
Hey Ann
Thanks for the honesty Ann I am still not sure of the layout I will take a look I may change it or take it back to standard ,,, very glad you liked this one
love and hugs JC xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats