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Halloween fun

Submitted by Tigger Kaz on Mon, 2024-10-07 17:38

Witches, pumpkins, and ghosts galore,
Even a phoney Dumbledore.
Vampires, Werewolves, and Pennywise,
Creepy realistic Halloween disguise .

Trawling the streets, shouting trick or treat,
Collecting a veritable stash of sweets.
Sharing the haul at the end of the night,
Once you have given your neighbours a fright.

Then Infront of the TV, to watch a scare fest,
Oh Freddy Kruger, you always scared best.
With your looks so disturbing, and ever so odd,
So glad I never watched it, all on my tod.

Those Halloween memories, a scary delight,
Sadly enjoyed for only one night.
And as I pack my costume away,
I mentally plan for the next costume day.

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Mon, 2024-10-07 23:40

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Geezer

Tue, 2024-10-08 09:21

the whole thing, right up until the last word! But what is a Tod? I know that sometimes we have lines that we just hate to get rid of, but when you have to make up a word to get the rhyme right... I think you have a big vocabulary and enough smarts to figure that line out, without making up a word. ~ Geez.
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Tigger Kaz

Wed, 2024-10-09 07:35

Not a made up word..

on one's tod
phrase of tod
informal•British
on one's own.
"I'm going to do something, not just sit here on my tod"

I guess I forget that people from other parts of the world, may not understand some traditional English phrases.

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Geezer

Wed, 2024-10-09 14:44

In that case...

I would put a comma in between the word [it] and [all]. It was the odd way of expressing it, that made me think that it was a made-up word for T.V.
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Candlewitch

Wed, 2024-10-09 08:00

Dear Tiger,

I love Halloween poetry, or any spooky works! You have laid down an amusing piece of entertainment here. I thank you for it!

*hugs, Cat

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Halloween fun