The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem effectively employs natural imagery to convey a sense of deep connection and enduring love. The use of "wind-blown fallen leaves" and "the color of fading rust" creates a vivid picture in the reader's mind. However, the title does not seem to align with the content of the poem. It might be beneficial to consider a title that reflects the themes of nature, love, and timelessness presented in the poem.

The line "The color of fading rust of the dying day waiting to be born anew tomorrow" could benefit from some punctuation to improve readability. Consider breaking it up into smaller phrases or using commas to indicate pauses.

The phrase "you are the breath of my life" is a powerful metaphor that encapsulates the speaker's feelings for the subject of the poem. However, the phrase "our souls are twin and timeless" could be rephrased for clarity. The term "twin" could potentially be replaced with a term that better conveys the idea of two souls being inextricably linked.

Lastly, the poem could benefit from a more consistent rhythm or meter to enhance its musicality. This could be achieved by adjusting the syllable count or stress pattern in each line.

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Wonderful opening lines. Enough to get anyone the feeling of being enslaved to a true love source.
Wish you a happy life together many years to come

...is such a strong word...let me try to help you take that down..how about "Fall(ing) for You?"

Thomas

"Timeless"

Lx

An awesome poem! I can't really think of a title. Maybe "What of Love"?

I wanted to suggest "Timeless Souls", but yours is perfect.

This is such a deep and sincere poem. Truly from the heart.
L

Yes, I believe that your souls are "twin and timeless". I loved the lines "yours is the face I see, when I first awake it reminds me of an earlier time! Once more a great poem.