The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem, titled "DEATH," employs vivid and evocative imagery to explore the theme of mortality. The use of metaphors such as "meat suit unzips and falls" and "cold stone tattooed in my date of birth" effectively convey the physicality and finality of death. However, the poem could benefit from more consistent punctuation and syntax to enhance readability and comprehension.

The first stanza introduces the reader to the concept of death with the image of a heart fading out. The second stanza seems to depict the process of burial, but the lack of punctuation makes it difficult to discern the intended meaning. Consider revising for clarity.

The third stanza introduces the concept of the "cold stone tattooed in my date of birth." This is a powerful image, but the phrase "and when I left earth" is somewhat awkward. Perhaps rephrase for smoother flow.

The fourth stanza effectively conveys the emptiness and loss associated with death. However, the phrase "now crooked and soulless" could be more effectively integrated into the stanza.

The final stanza encapsulates the theme of the poem, suggesting that all possessions and memories are ephemeral. The phrase "that once was borrowed now given away" is a poignant reminder of the transient nature of life. However, the phrase "ghosted away" might be too colloquial for the overall tone of the poem.

In summary, the poem effectively explores the theme of death through vivid imagery and metaphor. However, it could benefit from revisions to punctuation, syntax, and phrasing for improved clarity and flow.

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I enjoyed reading this - despite the subject matter. I found it very crafty and thought provoking! Well done!
Best,
captain