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Count and Share your Blessings
The pace of life seems crazy,
In who it leaves behind.
Yet the greed of the wealthy,
Means too many do not mind.
A cavernous void, for the supposed lazy,
With few hands to lift them out.
When alright jacks have plenty,
Caring little for those with nought.
Empathy lacking, apethetic souls,
Blinded by selfish greed,
Have lost the ability,
To share with those in need
Narratives of competition,
Knocked their kindness away.
Changed their life's direction,
And led them all astray
Be not like these unkindly people,
Proffer a hand to help the poor.
For tomorrow is not yet come,
And you don't know what's in store.
Life changes on a hairpin,
your luck could turn around.
Fame and fortune today,
Tomorrow could run you aground.
Feel grateful for your blessings,
Leave jealousy at the door,
Share good fortune with each other,
And stop perpetually wanting more.
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Tue, 2024-08-13 01:05
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Geezer
Tue, 2024-08-13 08:41
I really enjoyed...
hearing the British accent as I read this.
[The words you choose]. I thought that you wrote some very true lines,
"Empathy lacking, apethetic souls,
Blinded by selfish greed,
Have lost the ability,
To share with those in need"
It seems that the richer some get, the less they think about the poor.
Very nice job, ~ Geez.
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Tigger Kaz
Tue, 2024-08-13 11:42
Thanks Geezer
Thanks Geezer
author commentRula
Fri, 2024-08-16 17:06
Words of wisdom
Well said!
Many great lines. Much appreciate it
Thank you for sharing
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Tigger Kaz
Sat, 2024-08-17 05:01
Thank you
Thank you
author commentClentin
Sat, 2024-08-17 03:04
Very nice poem. Reflects true
Very nice poem. Reflects true feelings
Tigger Kaz
Sat, 2024-08-17 05:02
Thank you
Thank you
author commentCandlewitch
Sat, 2024-08-17 08:20
Hello Tigger,
I much enjoyed your poem! have not seen much of you lately. What have you been up to?
*hugs, Cat
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Tigger Kaz
Sat, 2024-08-17 15:08
Glad you liked it
Thanks for your feedback.
I have been attempting to keep my daughter amused on her 6 weeks school break.
2 more weeks left to go, and counting lol.
author commentTigger Kaz
Sat, 2024-08-17 15:06
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author commentLeslie
Mon, 2024-10-14 09:26
Tigger Kaz
So true, this poem. I don't know if I have the beautiful hope which you possess. I felt so strongly about the very last line among so many others, great poetry. By the way I am 3/4 Irish by decent. How old is your daughter. I have two of my own and six grand daughters. One of my grand daughters is named Ireland Rose.
Our dreams lost! Lost on an ocean of turmoil! Soon a solution will arrive! Until then I will write!
Clentin
Mon, 2024-10-14 11:38
I read the poem several more
I read the poem several more times. I find the nasty elements of a lot of
People todaywho foster greed, apathy, lack pf any understanding of those in need.
Good poem, keep writing.