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My Bucket List

I fell in love with a heart so true,
I cherish moments, both old and new.
I learned from failures of the past
I pray these actions will always last

My bucket list as a young man, so vast,
A journey of self-discovery, meant to last.
I chased my dreams with passion and might,
In the pursuit of life, to find the light.

Now that life is closer to the end
My bucket list begins to bend
A list once so big and wide
Now is small but full of pride

I no longer wish for cars or money
I seek love and comfort and a bit of honey
I want to see my family live with success
Free of illness free of stress

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "My Bucket List" demonstrates a strong understanding of the human experience, particularly in regards to the evolution of personal desires and priorities over time. The use of the 'bucket list' as a metaphor for life's changing goals is effective and relatable.

However, there are areas where the poem could be improved. The rhythm and meter of the poem are inconsistent, which can disrupt the flow for the reader. For example, the second and fourth lines of the first stanza have different syllable counts, which creates an uneven rhythm. The poet might consider revising these lines to create a more consistent meter throughout the poem.

The use of clichés, such as "I fell in love with a heart so true" and "I chased my dreams with passion and might," can detract from the poem's originality. The poet might consider replacing these phrases with more unique and personal expressions.

The transition between the second and third stanzas is abrupt. The poet might consider adding more detail or context to smooth this transition and to provide a more nuanced depiction of the speaker's journey from youth to old age.

Lastly, the poem's imagery could be more vivid and specific. Instead of general statements like "I seek love and comfort and a bit of honey," the poet might consider using more concrete and sensory language to create a more immersive experience for the reader.

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My favorite line
I seek love and comfort and a bit of honey
And I agree Love and comfort can be better then money. I enjoyed the self discovery depiction of a life well lived.

Thank you for reading and your generous comments

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Great! I enjoy the honesty and morality in your poetry!

Life is not tragedy although sometimes painful. Experience yields its bittersweet fruit!

Thank you for reading and comments. I see poetry as the thoughts, feelings and emotions of the writer, more than form but from the heart.
Again, thankyou

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And all I think we can hope for in the end...material things seem less important when we put things in perspective. Happiness, good health and success for those we love are what really matters.

~RoseBlack~

So true Rose
Thank you fir reading and comments

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So true Rose
Thank you fir reading and comments

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Hello, Clentin,
Another gem from you. The rhyme is sharp, and the rhythm flows so easily. I agree with its theme - as we age, our bucket lists change as we realize what is truly important and special to us. I enjoyed this!
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Thank you for your reading and comments. I really appreciate it. Lately I have not written munch.

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awesome!
A writing all can relate to.
I've much enjoyed.
Best wishes!

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