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The Wick
The Wick
Written by Kelly Ann Wilson
We are but a candle
With the wick already cut
We’re born and it starts burning
And that will be all the time we’ve got
At first it burns quite slowly
It’s so very fresh and new
As time goes by, we come to learn
The candle burned down as we grew
I think maybe all we can hope
As we go through our years
Is to bring some light and warmth
To the world
While we are here
Written December 3, 2023
© 2023 Kelly Ann Wilson
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
Last few words:
Read my writer’s blog at https://kwilsonarts.wordpress.com
Editing stage:
Contest:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Candlewitch
Sat, 2023-12-30 17:35
Hello Kelly Ann Wilson,
Congratulations on your win!
*hugs, Cat
*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
Leslie
Sun, 2023-12-31 01:28
Leslie
Wow, so soft and smooth. I loved this, great write!
All of God's children singing, holding hands in the rain!
Leslie
Sun, 2023-12-31 01:29
Leslie
Wow, so soft and smooth. I loved this, great write!
All of God's children singing, holding hands in the rain!
Alex Tanner
Sun, 2023-12-31 10:11
Hello Kelly
I enjoyed this piece and congratulations on your deserved win. It does seem to me to be a bit of a mix between free verse and rhymed. My own personal taste is for rhymed poetry. I would take some of the words out without detracting from the sense of the piece. Once again, congratulations. Alex
RTBeverly
Sun, 2023-12-31 13:19
Awesome
I loved how you brought the image of a candle burning and compared it life ticking by. Great imagery. Kelly for the win!