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Parents
Parents conceive young ones out of love
They educate them with great care
They protect them without thought
They punish them at times
They cry when they fail
They smile with them
They bless them
They pray
Love
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Clentin
Mon, 2023-02-27 09:03
Thank you trying different
Thank you trying different formats
Lavender
Mon, 2023-02-27 09:04
Parents
Hello, Clentin,
This is a perfect nonet in every way. It is quite beautiful. I especially enjoy the way the 7 inner lines all have a similar appearance and the first and last lines are different from the others and hold the word "love" giving the sense of boundaries, protection - perhaps a hug.
Thank you for this,
L
Clentin
Mon, 2023-02-27 09:26
Thank you for your comments
Thank uou for your comment, i ppreciate tem very much
I wonder if the title should be love and the last line be Parents?
Lavender
Mon, 2023-02-27 09:38
Parents
Hi, Clentin,
The last line is a strong word for the feeling in your poem, and just as necessary, it has the correct syllable count. :)
L
lovedly
Mon, 2023-02-27 11:02
Nice parenting it's ok
But none of your poets have said ..
there are too many
they
revise you may
and
why all first letters as Caps
it thus seems to be a statement
more than a poem
Apply your mind if you may
why dismay...