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'Murica the Beautiful
Another sunken craft gave up
Settled into the silt of shallow water
in the dilapidated marina
The water and tide have been patient
Waiting for decay to exert its' influence
while we pay no attention
to the work that never ceases
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Free verse
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I frequently walk by a run-down marina, and have watched the abandoned craft falter and decay over the years. The overall delapidation frequently captures my melancholy with the state of the world.
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Comments
Candlewitch
Sun, 2022-07-17 05:36
dear MIchael,
how totally wretched. I can see how that would cause great distress! Can anyone do anything about it? a petition, perhaps?
*hugs, Cat
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Michael Anthony
Sun, 2022-07-17 09:26
Thanks Cat. There is planned
Thanks Cat. There is planned development along this particular waterfront, so this should take care of itself in time.
Best
Michael Anthony
Candlewitch
Sun, 2022-07-17 09:34
dear Tim,
glad to read of it.
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Geezer
Sun, 2022-07-17 09:50
Sort of...
like the slow decay of our country, huh?
I noted the same metaphorical/anology state myself. Excellent work!
~ Geez.
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Michael Anthony
Sun, 2022-07-17 10:27
Thanks Geez!
Thanks Geez!
Michael Anthony
Rosewood Apothecary
Sun, 2022-07-17 20:20
On a long enough timeline
“On a long enough time line, the survival rate for everyone (everything) drops to zero.“
Chuck Palahnuik
Michael Anthony
Mon, 2022-07-18 19:40
Great quote RA! Thanks for
Great quote RA! Thanks for stopping by.
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Michael Anthony