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The Clown. [June's Contest]
Mr. clown's house is always a mess;
he never finds his belongings
but he cares for the motley dress,
the red nose, and the tight-strings.
He came back late last night,
he was almost sleeping,
he wore the sandwiches at sight,
and ate the glasses he was wearing.
He missed the kitchen for the WC,
he switched off the toilet's light,
so he couldn't tell where to pee
till the sun is high with day-light.
When he decided to go to bed
he searched for his head, up'n down
Yet kept awake the whole night instead,
for he failed to find the sleeping-gown.
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Style / type:
Structured: Western
Editing stage:
Contest:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Rula
Sun, 2020-06-07 13:07
Hello Jerry
well I am pretty satisfied if I could give someone dear a chuckle. I always thought that writing something funny in a foreign/ second language the most difficult to do.
Much appreciate your kind suggestion. I edited as suggested.
I wonder if lay a bed is wrong... Have you read
Stevenson's "The Land of Counterpane?"
https://poets.org/poem/land-counterpane
and how is his first line different in meaning than mine?
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Geezer
Mon, 2020-06-08 11:42
Love this...
Your clown is really funny and I applaud your sense of humor, which stands out here. Lying [a bed] is alright for a phrase, but it should be used as: [abed]. ~ Geezer.
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Rula
Mon, 2020-06-08 16:42
Thank you Gee
Much appreciate the clarification and the words
of appreciation!
Highly appreciate it!
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lovedly
Sun, 2020-06-07 11:21
ha ha ha
what a clown he must have really been
clowns are normally the best
circus beings
they save others
from unrest
and catch em
when they need arrest
Rula
Sun, 2020-06-07 12:43
Lovedly
another dear friend now is having a chuckle... Well I think this is my lucky day. Thank you for reading my humble piece.
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lovedly
Sun, 2020-06-07 13:21
ha ha ha lol
hope u will win
I am also trying
as the joker
comes out of me
Sen99
Sun, 2020-06-07 12:12
comic
lol what a clown, this is my favorite line "and ate the glasses he's wearing." made me laugh, has anyone actually done this, must be painful ---))
Rula
Sun, 2020-06-07 12:46
Sen99
I think this our first time to meet. I think my clown is unique of his kind. He does what no other would do. I appreciate highly your kind visit. My pleasure .
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Rula
Sun, 2020-06-07 15:07
Dear teddy
Thank you. I suspected that that line doesn't read well. I appreciate pointing it out.
Always appreciate your honesty :)
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c lynn brooks
Sun, 2020-06-07 14:23
Rula
poor Mr. Clown he sure has his share of problems lol
very amusing to read
Chrys
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Rula
Sun, 2020-06-07 15:08
Dear C lynn
Can't thank you enough for your kind words.
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Rula
Sun, 2020-06-07 15:39
Ha Alan!
What the heck! You look much more like a tidy person for me, but there is nothing strange for such a talented poet, I think.^_^
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tyro
Sun, 2020-06-07 17:29
Now that I call funny, poor
Now that I call funny, poor clown. Well done dear Rula, my favorite june contest so far.
T
The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight
Rula
Mon, 2020-06-08 16:45
Thank you dear Tyro
My pleasure. I highly value your kind visit.
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lovedly
Sun, 2020-06-07 17:39
If had any sense I'd know you will win again
so I shan't post
my 5.25 am poem
Rula have you read it
yet
Lavender
Mon, 2020-06-08 22:36
The Clown
Hi, Rula!
The topsy-turvy life of your clown! Thank you for the laugh!
L
Rula
Wed, 2020-06-10 02:06
Lavender dear
I like the topsy turvy expression, first time to hear it, and yes this is my clown :)
Thank you for your time dear.
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scribbler
Mon, 2020-06-08 22:44
But Rula
I Didn't visit your house last night lol.
Rula
Wed, 2020-06-10 02:10
Ha Stan!
but you were somewhere manipulating my clown.,,o:-)
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