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Funny Thing...
A funny thing happened on the way here
I can't remember what it was
I think I stopped to have a beer
That may be why or maybe just because
I followed you to Laughter Street
There was no other way to go
And because you lost your feet
I laughed at you, you know
The way you fell upon your bum
In an awkward, funny dance
Made me think of a person dumb
With fire in their pants
You hopped and skittered all around
Like a dancer in a fit
Because of you, I think I found
The way to laughter's wit
But now it's over and I find
With chuckles and a grin
I really think I've lost my mind
This poem, it can't win
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Structured: Eastern
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Comments
scribbler
Fri, 2020-06-05 23:30
Now
I think it's funny watching others fall as long as they don't get injured. Ever noticed that no matter where you are and whether anybody is around the first thing a person does after they trip or fall is to look and see if anybody saw them?lol. Indeed a few years ago I slipped on a muddy spot on a hillside about a mile from nearest road. Thought my knee would kill me but first thing I did was look around hoping nobody saw
Geezer
Fri, 2020-06-05 23:36
Yeah...
Ain't that the truth? Never wish to see anyone hurt, but it sure can be funny.
I love to see them fall after skating around on the ice or in a slippery spot of oil or something. Thanks for stopping by. ~ Gee.
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Geezer
Sat, 2020-06-06 05:51
I saw a video...
of someone on TV the other night; [one of those shows that show people in awkward situations] and he slipped and slid like he was in a dance. That's what prompted this one. I never want to see someone hurt, and hopefully he wasn't. it sure was funny though. Yes, I have taken a few falls myself and once or twice, I have been hurt. But, still would have loved to seen a video of it. Geezer.
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tyro
Sat, 2020-06-06 13:29
The way you fell upon your
The way you fell upon your bum
In an awkward, funny dance
Made me think of a person dumb
With fire in their pants
My favorite stanza and the whole is well said.
T
The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight
Lavender
Sat, 2020-06-06 18:41
Funny Thing...
Hi, Geezer,
"...fire in their pants.' So true. There is no graceful way to fall, which is why I pop right back up and spring both arms in the air - touchdown! I like your title! Very funny poem!
Thank you,
L
Rula
Sun, 2020-06-07 03:38
Strange enough
I never laugh when I see someone falling... Maybe I put myself in his/her shoe?
But your poem tells true about peole I've watched through out my life and trust me they weren't few :)
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