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Just Because...
Just because you only dress to attract attention
It doesn't mean that only nice people will look at you
[The person I want to look at me, should be twenty-five years old, have a nice car, plenty of money
and be as sweet as a newborn baby.]
Just because automobiles aren't supposed to hit you
It doesn't mean that you should walk in the road
[I should be able to walk where there are no bumps or cracks in my path
and I don't have to lift my feet higher than my ankle.]
Just because no one is supposed to punch you in the face
It doesn't mean that you should be an asshole
[I should be able to say anything I want, to anyone I want.]
Just because you think that you are privileged
It doesn't mean that you are
[Just because... ]
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
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Comments
Geezer
Tue, 2017-11-28 16:52
A sweet young thing...
walking in the road, inspired this when she yelled at me; "Hey, what the hell are you looking at, you old perv?"
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Keith Logan
Wed, 2017-11-29 02:49
I am also an old perv
In years gone by I was a young perv.
No matter how old we get, we still have eyes.
Keith Logan
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lovedly
Wed, 2017-11-29 03:18
O KL do applyb ur brainy mind to..The Hour of Departure lol
Excellent reply
how my latest finest poem
has skipped your eye
latest on on life and death....
do your mind apply
so many have
yet it's an unfinished one
Dear poet
Geezer
Wed, 2017-11-29 17:09
Yes, we do...
I imagine that unless one is blind, we look. ~ Gee.
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lovedly
Wed, 2017-11-29 01:40
[The person I want to look at me, should be twenty-five years ol
[The person I want to look at me, should be twenty-five years old, have a nice car, plenty of money
and be as sweet as a newborn baby.]
I am plus just 50+++ more
no car at all
money yes
in some few coins
you may call change
as far as sweetness goes
I am like a half rotten pineapple
neither can you devour
nor throw
that is all is what's a woman's woe
thank god
I have an appendage
dangling...
new style 'twas lovely
she caught your eye
and
that for her was a Derby
she must've have smiled
delicious poetry
sweet and lovely
lovedly
Wed, 2017-11-29 03:17
The Hour of Departure
The Hour of Departure
just can't miss it
Geezer
Thu, 2017-11-30 17:30
I have commented...
on "The Hour of Departure" ~ Gee.
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Sparrow
Wed, 2017-11-29 03:54
Gee my friend
Dream on and on, there in the mirror of truth is reality.
I see it every day and smile.
Good write though, hope you don't have this dream to often it will only make you feel sad..lol
Take care out there, Yours, Ian.
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Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti
Geezer
Wed, 2017-11-29 17:13
Dreams are made...
of nice things, while nightmares incorporate the truth. Thanks for stopping by. I always enjoy your comments. ~ Gee.
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Geezer
Thu, 2017-11-30 17:32
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Simon
Wed, 2017-11-29 04:29
THE TRUTH IS BITER
the truth is as biter as poison but heals perfectly,it happens on a daily bases.
i must say that love this poem like no other.
Geezer
Wed, 2017-11-29 17:17
Thank you Simon...
Yes, truth can be bitter, but not always. It is truth that I am an old pervert by her standards.
She just wants young handsome men with money and a nice car to look at her, anyone else is a pervert!
Thanks for stopping by, ~ Geezer.
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Keith Logan
Wed, 2017-11-29 15:38
Geezer
I like this collection of little homilies. You have a way with words.
Keith Logan
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Geezer
Wed, 2017-11-29 17:20
Thanks again...
I have always loved words and what you can do with them. I think the greatest thing about humankind is that we speak! I sincerely doubt that as a species, we would have risen to the top of the pyramid if we did not have this means of communication. ~ Gee.
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Keith Logan
Wed, 2017-11-29 20:17
I do believe
you are right. I think speach/verse was the first way of passing knowledge from one generation to the next and next again.
Keith Logan
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Keith Logan
Wed, 2017-11-29 20:28
I recall
as a young man walking straight up to a well endowed young lady and peering down her chest, then turning to her boyfriend quipped you lucky fellow. When she objected and asked her boyfriend to defend her honour, I replied "If you put them on display, you can't blame a man for looking." Again, he agreed.
Keith Logan
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lovedly
Sat, 2017-12-02 10:54
beautiful reply
had I been she
I'd take it as a compliment really
lonlyhrtsclub13
Tue, 2017-12-05 21:22
How true
Everyone has this perception of how things should be and if you do not fit into it...they find ways to eliminate u....just because...
Keep Writing,
Carrie
"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"