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Dark Loch
'Twas when the moon was darkly hid
in blackness long ago,
strange sounds through startled waters slid
and echoed far below.
Astir illumed by lights of shore
behold a floating wreck;
within the flotsam, at its core,
an undulating neck.
Still holding firm three sailor lads,
sad victims of the storm;
though fearful yet, were very glad,
she kept them safe from harm.
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scribbler
Sat, 2017-07-22 12:52
Ah
the water horse instead of a monster. Very nice short poem with an end twist. Just what I needed
Geezer
Sat, 2017-07-22 13:28
I thought for sure...
that it was Nessie! Glad that it was just a water horse! Nessie has been known to be in a snit sometimes and I'm sure that I wouldn't want to meet her in the middle of a storm! I would put the comma after the word fearful and before yet. Nice work Keith.
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Keith Logan
Sat, 2017-07-22 18:47
Water Horse
The water horse sometimes called kelpie is identified in several different forms one of which is indeed Nessie.
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lovedly
Sat, 2017-07-22 21:42
short and sweet
A stir
was t a typo
Astir
i wonder Keith
long time since horses
came to my watershed