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Sure, here's a poem summarizing my experience critiquing the two poems:

Words and lines, a canvas white,
Two poems wait, for critique's light.
With pen in hand, I start to write,
Evaluating form, and insight.

One speaks of clowns, of joy and pain,
A structured verse, with whimsy's reign.
Its language playful, and surreal,
Absurdity, its humor's seal.

The Clown (Al Workshop)

Mr. clown's house is always a mess;
he never finds his belongings
but he cares for the motley dress,
the red nose, and the tight-strings.

He came back late last night,
he was almost sleeping,
he wore the sandwiches at sight,
and ate the glasses he was wearing.

He missed the kitchen for the WC,
he switched off the toilet's light,
so he couldn't tell where to pee
till the sun is high with day-light.

The Poet's Cat

The poet’s cat is so sedate; she’s happy with her feline fate.
She snoozes on the garden wall, too dignified to fret or fall.
When strolling ‘cross the busy street, her heart maintains a steady beat.
She’s so serene and so seraphic, fearless of the teeming traffic.

The poet’s cat lies in the sun when poet’s day at work’s begun.
(He works, you see, so schemes and sweats. Has bills to pay, including vet’s!)
She flicks her tail and seems to say, "Leave me to have a lazy day.
I’ll dabble with idyllic dream, while you regard your work regime.”

ADONAI!

I’m more than what you see
There’s something deep inside me
That makes me laugh, makes me cry
That oft times makes me feel like dying
What purpose would it serve
To do something that absurd
So when I’m down I hold it back
Collect my thoughts to stay on track
And when the night is dark and cold
I think of all the stories told
Held within my frenzied mind
And close my eyes
Take a breath or two
And silently remember You!
That someday I might dwell with You!
Adonai, Adonai, Adonai!

ADONAI!

I’m more than what you see
There’s something deep inside me
That makes me laugh, makes me cry
That oft times makes me feel like dying
What purpose would it serve
To do something that absurd
So, when I’m down I hold it back
I collect my thoughts to stay on track
And when the night is dark and cold
I think of all the stories told
Held within my frenzied mind
And close my eyes
Take a breath or two
And silently remember You!
That someday I might dwell with you!
Adonai, Adonai, Adonai!

To Earth and Sky

Grounded, let me taste the earth
From the dust, this gift of birth
To the ashes and the soil
Release me from this mortal coil

Spirits rise into the sky
Constellations bright and shy
Home above the vapor’s shroud
Rain to earth from laden clouds

Fear

Emotion gone wild
Causing us to seek support
Through loved ones and God

Drift-Away Gifts

Some of the women drove me crazy.
And some I was crazy about
while I was holding on to things
that were really never mine.

And every time I let go of the gifts
they had brought with them
I found myself able to grow a little
as my heart, after it could see again,
was grateful for the journey.

My Freedom

‘I’m sad,” you say
Mocking poetry.

“Useless,” you say
Egging me on.

“Waste of time” you say,
Trying to make me stop.

I left you behind for freedom.

Writing…
It’s the only freedom I know.

Writing is my tires on the road
With destination unknown.

Writing is my escape
When I feel trapped inside myself.

My direction
When I feel lost.

My foundation
When life is unsteady.

Blue On Beige

I am bewitched by this hour of day
when the sun lays low in the sky
and the glass bottle in my west window
spills its warm blueness
onto the living room wall -
brilliant color marrying soft beige

I am quiet in this moment
as my breathing couples
with the sound of the second-hand
of my grandmother's clock
and I accept that time ages me
even as the shadows grow deeper
until blue and beige blend into
one another, sleepy from the sunset

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