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Submitted by Michael Anthony on Sat, 2024-02-24 11:18

"Where are we going?" his young daughter asked.

"To cheer up some of my friends," he replied.

"They seem to be a lot of work for you," she offered with concern.

"Yes," he said, “You’re right. The very best kind of work."

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Free verse
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Lavender

Sat, 2024-02-24 19:22

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Hello, Michael,
An endearing, brief conversation that offers so much. Reminds me a bit of the exchanges Winnie-the-Pooh shares with Piglet. Gentle and small in words, but big on important lessons.
Thank you,
L

Michael Anthony

Sat, 2024-02-24 19:38

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Busted - LOL! That is exactly where I got the inspiration in ragard to the format. You poetry detective you! Thanks for stopping by.

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Michael Anthony

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Lavender

Sat, 2024-02-24 19:43

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That is too cool! Well, it's meant as a compliment! You are in wonderful company with Pooh and A.A. Milne!
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Leslie

Sun, 2024-02-25 12:18

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...that, in my opinion has got to be the most meaningful and true thing ever written. It is what it is all about!!!!!!!!!
Thank you Michael!

The power of our language can and will change the world.
Successively until our languages become one!

Michael Anthony

Mon, 2024-02-26 23:50

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Very kind L! Happy you liked this piece, and really apreciate you sharing your thoughts.

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Michael Anthony

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William Lynn

Mon, 2024-02-26 21:04

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Quick, concise, and meaningful. Often that is what poems can offer, and you delivered. Well done.

Thanks, Will

Michael Anthony

Mon, 2024-02-26 23:51

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Thank you Will!

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Michael Anthony

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