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Words

Submitted by Rosewood Apothecary on Sun, 2022-10-30 19:44

Glory be to written words
Praise to those who write them
I find myself within the text
It brings me understanding

When through the night I think alone
Seeking any comfort
I’ll find it in another’s words
Through tiny revelations

I’m not alone with all my fears
Nor am I with my joy
So many now who mirror thoughts
I never knew I had

Lost within the magic spells
I’m reading with my soul
Worlds are changed with every word
The words are changing mine

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Last few words: 
Well it’s quiet today with the sportsball games. I’ve been into fair Emily again a bit recently and I think this one sounds like her and I’m proud of that.
Editing stage: 
Editing - polished draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

Michael Keens

Sun, 2022-10-30 20:10

'Worlds are changed with every word
The words are changing mine' Makes me wonder if you can trick yourself into changing your life by writing things you know to be untrue. Because a placebo stops working when you are aware of it. But there is something to be said for positive thinking still to a certain extent. Although you refer to reading others words, which changes how you feel, if those people are also trying to kid themselves, maybe it should be even more ineffective. Reading these poems just make me think it's like modern art. Can be interpreted in so many different ways. No right or wrong. Maybe people read into things depending on how they subconsciously want to feel. which is happiness but people are made happy by different things

Lavender

Sun, 2022-10-30 22:17

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Hello, Tim,
This is very Emily, especially in rhythm and pace. (Is this Western? I'm having trouble seeing the rhyme pattern.) I really like your theme. The more I read other poets' work, the more I love poetry and want to write more of my own. So much is intimately shared in the realm of poets. Words are powerful.
Thank you!
L
I believe you may want to change "that" to "who" in the second line of your first stanza if you are speaking of people.

Rosewood Apothecary

Mon, 2022-10-31 00:09

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Yeah that’s grammar mistake on account of me growing up fairly “street” with the blue collar kids that largely flunked English/Lit.

Thanks for your kind words and quick eyes ,
Tim

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lovedly

Mon, 2022-10-31 00:14

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Lost within the magic spells
I’m reading with my soul
Worlds are changed with every word
The words are changing mine

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