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TWILIGHT

Submitted by Esker on Thu, 2012-05-24 01:13

Phosphorus
blade
churn the toilsome task

the jet king lay with broken backs
our enemy will feel our racks
sleek filled with bombs
and piloted by pretty blondes

the twilight time has thus
arrived and dwindled down
mans perfect tribe
our archive war machines
we trust will keep our
foes in blood and rust

Strong pilots virgins blessed
by magic
radio wireless witchs
armed with automatics
they will dump revenge
on calamitous ruin
and on rightous foundations
babies hewn
for the perfect race
of peace and calm

away away winged warrior
beauties
heroinne birds
sacrificing life for duty

saving whats left of life
for mans kingdom ruined
destroying the last of
the evil strewn

death from above is the only
way to blight the wonder
of a perfect new day

A prayer to our gods we worship
and praise
to our mighty new empire of gold
we shall raise

Editing stage: 
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Proprietress of...

Thu, 2012-05-24 05:17

Proprietress of Crimson Hearts's picture

just one poem, here in china
and I chose this one
coincidentally so right for my mood
so much history here
in Pingyao, beautiful dirty Pingyao
so peaceful and loud and warm
away away winged warrior
beauties
heroinne birds
sacrificing life for duty
I get tired of my blonde hair
because I cannot blend in
even if I try, hard as I might
everyone stares, gets excited
I suppose I'll get used to it
as soon as I step on the plane
taking me back home
and then crave the attention
silly

Esker

Thu, 2012-05-24 08:27

Esker's picture

Catch 22 of all things and then link after link of planes
the chariot gods wreaking death
Native have thunderbirds etc
and the Viking connection with Valkryies etc

Watched Sucker Punch clips too
and was thinking of the Americans in Iraq
the female pilots in the A-10s and then
the C-130s with all female crews

the fiction was the end of the world
of course on my end
with just females leading into battle
as some histories women did
Vintage planes drawn up again for
battle as they still are being used
for putting out fires in the west

Anyway on one B-25 link there
was a female pilot
Russians had them in bi planes
in world war two bombing german
positions etc

war sucks but instead of all the
women painted On the planes
what about them IN the planes

Blondes in the dark of hair
that would be the site!

History
China

yes
everywhere

Thank You and Hello!

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judyanne

Thu, 2012-05-24 11:02

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'churn the toilsome task’ – truly exquisite to read aloud

are all the men dead from fighting esker?

great inconspicuous alliteration
‘ the twilight time has thus’
… ‘dwindled down’

the beginning ‘phosphorus’ is brought to mind at
pilots virgins blessed
by magic
radio wireless witchs -- typo – ‘witches’
… beauties’
as yellow phosphorus is the most poisonous, flammable, and luminous in the dark

‘heroinne birds’ --- typo ‘heroine’

I so enjoy coming to your writes… they never disappoint
but there is never anything to crit :-(
love judy
xxx

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