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THE TREASURE OF SILENCE

I've reaped the treasure of silence
into prominence of creative flame
poetry is an erection of thoughts
stirred behind the wheel of the mind

I'm a solitary poet of African nation
I'm like a swinging of a pendulum
thoughts in me vibrates to - and- fro
that's why am delivering it to you all

in silence I lay with great solemnity
that's why I'm thoughtfully crafted
with revelations of poetic language
heralding to the ears of all people

time shall come when I shall depart
'fore then, I shall encrypt my words
through the seal of literary devices
making eavesdropping impossible

©® Onyinyechi Cosmos Etu

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I like the imagery here.

“poetry is an erection of thoughts” now there is an image….

In reaching out to the people, not just those around you, good work there.

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A bunch of thanks for reading and commenting. I'm glad you liked this line: “poetry is an erection of thoughts”
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"Time will crush on us if we don't utilize it. Just remember, you're an element of time".

~Jackweb

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I really like that. The whole poem is excellent but that last stanza really completes the idea. Very strong poem.

Tim

I'm glad you liked it. Thanks a bunch for reading and commenting.
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"Time will crush on us if we don't utilize it. Just remember, you're an element of time".

~Jackweb

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